Talk:History of Shanghai
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[edit] Article Problems
Most of the article reads like it was written by an official Chinese government propaganda body. 79.207.157.226 (talk) 19:34, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
- The main problem with this article is that there are too many superfluous details. Much of the content is obscured by subjective or unverifiable generalizations. The article is really quite tedious and confusing. The History of Beijing article, by comparison, is streamlined and readable. And, Beijing is actually an older city. The basic layout of this article seems workable, but I think a serious re-write of each section is necessary.
- winstonho0805 (talk) 06:45, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
[edit] Rewrite
I attemptted to rewrite the first part of this article, up through the Chinese society section. It's hard to place the events in this article on a timeline, thus I tried to mimick other "History of Cities" pages in China and use the Dynasty framework. It was problematic at the end of the Quing Dynasty, which is relatively where I stopped.
If anyone has any better ideas, please go for it. I may try to finish rewriting this article in a few days. Judging by the grammar mistakes, my guess is that the article was written by a chinese government official, as someone had suggested earlier.'''Shawn''' (talk) 09:12, 1 October 2008 (UTC)
- There's still many non-specific time indicators that need to be edited out. For example, in the "Early Era" section has "which has only been recently irrigated" (confusing - was this pre-Ming or modern?); the "Ming dynasty" section starts with the word "later". I wouldn't mind helping, if you're amenable?
- Adevish (talk) 08:57, 4 October 2008 (UTC)
I went through the Early Era section and removed the "irrigation" references. They add nothing to the section and are confusing and unnecessary. We can add them in later if we find out they are necessary. I have this article on my watch list and will continue to work through the sections. Doctorfun (talk) 18:59, 1 January 2009 (UTC) (cleanup)
